Sound of the hi-hat
Steady four-four walking bass
Sparse piano chords
-Stephen Edwards
Explication:
This is a haiku that tries to poetically capture the visual and aural aspects of a jazz piano trio. I used a haiku to describe the jazz trio because a trio is very stripped down instrumentally, yet precise. The same with a haiku, only necessary words are used. It is a very stripped down form of poetry.
Nice stephen. I really like how you tried to capture the jazz trio. unfortunately i am terrible with music and notes so i couldnt really imagine what it would sound like but it did give me a mental image of you playing bass, so that was good.
ReplyDeleteStephen, I really liked your comparison of the haiku and the jazz trio you were describing. I feel like a lot of young poets just chose to write haikus because they are relatively easy, and it's nice to see someone with a legitamate reason. I also thought it was very interesting that you used repetition of the S sound at the beginning of each line. Did you have a particualr reason for that sound? Great job!
ReplyDeleteahhhh i luuuurv (its the same as 'love' ms patick) this so much! being in band myself i can hear all three instruments and play the song in my head. especially with your awesome walkin bass! great job brosef!
ReplyDeletegreat poem stephen! i feel like i can actually hear it. i really like how all the lines start with an s. thats actually the first time i have seen a haiku like that. and i didn't just copy rachel's comment, i noticed that myself.
ReplyDeleteNice poem stephen and I totally get it!! I find it really cool how you dedicated each line of your haiku to a instrument (drums, bass and piano) but collectively, they give the feeling of a trio playing. Good work!
ReplyDeleteNice and short, straight to the point, much like what this poem is talking about (a jazz trio: bass, piano and drums). Although I am a bit offended that guitar is replaced by piano, but I guess it can't be helped. Good job
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